One summer evening when I was about 10, Missy and I were doing gymnastics in her front yard. She was teaching me how to do handstands, but she kept getting distracted by the clover under her. I kept working at my handstands until the sun went down and it started getting dark.
Pretty soon, Rob and Matt called us to Chris and Beth's back porch, and we set up our game of Bloody Murder. I liked it way better than hide and seek.
Matt yelled:
"1 o'clock, 2 o'clock, 3 o'clock, 4 o'clock, 5 o'clock, 6 o'clock, 7 o'clock, 8 o'clock, 9 o'clock, 10 o'clock 11 o'clock, 12 o'clock! Ghosts come out tonight!!!"
And we all scattered.
I was fast, and knew every good hiding place on both sides of the street after years of playing. I made for my favorite spot, Mrs. Guthrie's front porch. She kept to herself and went to bed early, but the rest of the kids were afraid of her. I loved hiding on her porch because there was a big hedge around it on three sides, and it was near enough for me to see into my living room. I was afraid of the dark, and it made me feel a little safer to be closer to home.
On this particular night, we had so many kids playing that it got well past twilight and the streetlights had come on. I was determined to wait everyone else out and win, so I stayed where I was.
It got darker out, and I started to get really nervous. One by one, the other players were getting found, random shouts of "Bloody Murder!!!" peppered the night. But Matt hadn't come anywhere near Mrs. Guthrie's. Suddenly, Rob walked up between Mrs. Guthrie's and the Failor's house. He was a few years older than me, and was the fastest runner in the neighborhood.
He sat down on Mrs. Guthrie's steps and said ,"I've been pacing back and forth, watching around the side of Mrs. Guthrie's house for Matt, but he's been on the other side of the street looking for Chris and Sarah for a while now."
"I wonder if he's gonna come over here. He never comes across Mrs. Fischer's yard, but maybe he'll cross the street and find us this time, " I replied.
Rob spat off the porch and bent down to tie his sneaker. Eww.
Then he said, "Nah, he knows he doesn't have a chance at catching me, and he knows I'm always over here between the two garages, he just never looks. You've got a pretty good chance at winning this time, you got a good spot. But you have to outrun me. Which you'll never do."
He smirked at me, and snuck off around the side of Mrs. Gurthrie's house.
I heard Matt yell, "Olly Olly Oxen Free!" and I took off like a shot, determined to beat Rob to home base.
Author's note: I spent almost every afternoon and evening as a kid playing with this family up the street. I was between the first and second boy in age, but played more one on one with the oldest girl. Missy had a front page article in the local paper written about her four-leaf-clover-finding abilities the particular summer that this memory happened. I think about her and that article every time I see a four leaf clover. (There are clovers in the prompt picture beneath the hose.) Also, the boy that talked to me on Mrs. Guthrie's porch is the same boy I brought flowers to in first grade.






Can I just say that I really love how you looked at that picture and noticed the clovers. That is awesome. I also wonder if Missy is really lucky...with all that four leaf clover finding.
ReplyDeleteI love how you remembered the little things, like his spitting. Something about the mental image of him tying his shoe...I feel the smugness radiating off of him.
I hope you won!
Tracie: thanks for reading and commenting!
ReplyDeleteI didn't have any association with a garden hose, my mom didn't keep a garden, and we didn't play in the hose very much in the summer. I remember feeling relieved when Rob came around the side of the house, but then grossed out in the next minute, guess that's why it stuck around in my head. That swift motion of thoughtlessly spitting and then bending down perched on the step tying his shoe, I can see it clear as day. And he was a little smug, but with good reason: he was unbeatable in all things baseball, street hockey, and hide and seek.. fast, clever, and daring. I happened to run into their dad at the mall today, and that's another factor that contributed to kicking up this particular memory.
This was beautiful. I loved playing games of tag in the twilight hours of Summertime. We always played "slips." So many memories were brought out from your beautiful post. You took me there.
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I can completely feel the freedom of a youth summer, as I like to call them. The descriptions and dialogue were spot on!
ReplyDeleteI love first of all that you wrote about clovers. It feels like I am sitting on the front porch watching you play as I read your story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI spent a lot of time looking for 4 leaf clovers, I figured I was Irish and Irish girls should be able to spot them right away right?
ReplyDeleteSuch wonderful memories of playing in a simpler life than todays terms!
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ReplyDeleteI loved night games!
ReplyDeleteYou used such great words like twilight, peppered, and smirked.
My favorite part: "I was determined to wait everyone else out and win, so I stayed where I was." because it showed your personality, your mindset.
Great memory. I love the details about the different people's yards and who would go where, and which neighbors they were afraid of. The entire space comes to life.
ReplyDeleteLove it! It made me remember how there's a house in every neighborhood that kids avoid for some reason...I'd forgotten about that.
ReplyDeleteI laughed out loud at your reaction to the spitting on the ground! Great detail.
I loved neighborhood games like this as a kid. Took me right back to my childhood. I was always jealous of the girls who could do handstands because I was never that coordinated. ;)
ReplyDeleteSince I never found a 4-leaf clover, I spent a lot of time pretending the 3-leaf clovers were 4-leaf. I had a lot of free time.
ReplyDeleteI absolutely loved this. It actually made me feel that fear and anticipation of being caught or maybe, just maybe... winning
ReplyDeleteTracy: it was my pleasure to take you back there for a few minutes. It's a refreshing place to visit :)
ReplyDeleteMiel Abielle: thank you for affirming me about the dialogue, I am just starting to write dialogue, really, and there's just so much "he said, she replied" boredom you can get stuck in. Luckily this was a short exchange! And other than the neighbor's names, I worried about "show" since I am better at "tell".
Leah: Thank you for coming by and commenting! I'm glad you felt like you were right there. You'd have been across the street on Ms. Opal's porch, Mrs. Guthrie was her older sister. I spent time with Ms. Opal, that's why I wasn't afraid of Mrs. Guthrie.
Erin: I've never found a four leaf clover in my entire life. Not that summer with Missy and not since! I hear you.
Galit: Thank you as always for your concrit. I love the way you write, and therefore also love the way you encourage. The specific things that stick out to you always make me smile. Thanks for noticing my word choices and personality in this. :)
TKW: Thanks for reading and commenting! I figured that was a relatable detail, and that there would be women readers who would be similarly grossed out at Rob!
ReplyDeleteElena: thanks for commenting! My kids have not known the magic of nighttime play, and I hope when we move, I can give that to them. Writing about it makes me all warm and fuzzy, it was an integral part of my childhood. And Missy was much more coordinated than me, but she taught me how to walk on my hands as well as do front flips.
Erica M.: I had a lot of free time too, back then. I remember the afternoons in their back yard playing baseball and getting hit in the eye, I remember their younger brother Matt picking fights with me and how I always happened to be winning the fight when his dad came out to kick his butt for fighting with a girl.. and these long nights with hide and seek and bloody murder too. But I wasn't bored inside watching TV like my kids, and I'm glad, looking back.
LawMomma: HI!!! I'm so glad to see you here. thank you so much for coming to read and comment! That I was writing vividly enough to make you feel that fear and anticipation is a high compliment. I appreciate the feedback, really. :)
Carina: Thank you for reading and commenting, I am glad the neighborhood came to life for you. What I always hope to do is bring you with me to see the environment and then let you in on what was happening in my head. I am glad I included enough "show" to give you that feeling!
ReplyDeleteThere were clovers in that photo? ha ha! I didn't even notice them.
ReplyDeleteGreat job with the prompt, I thought the story read smoothly and I chuckled at your memory!
It reads like a piece out of a Harper Lee novel - poignant, nostalgic language. You captured well that feeling of those times before teenhood when life was all about playing with our friends in the neighborhood outside until it was time to go in for dinner.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece. Loved it.
As the youngest of the kids on my street playing hide and seek I can relate ;)
ReplyDeleteLoved the post.
What a great memory! Did you win? I hope so, cocky boys need to be put in their place every once in awhile :)
ReplyDeleteNeighborhood games.............THANK YOU!
ReplyDeleteThe memories flood in;
namely, philip pemberton and kick-the-can!!!
I too, wondered at the end, if missy was super blessed in life :)
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How fun! It made me feel like we were in the same place, whereas mine was during the day and in my backyard, but you were right around the corner in the front. ;) I love how you remembered everything. And the "addition" at the end with the extra info was too funny. An article on finding clovers? How interestingly curious ... gosh, how many games of hide and seek we played, and I never did learn to do a handstand, except in the water!
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I could really imagine being there on the porch with you. And love how you tried to outrun the older boy.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness, I thought of writing about the clover too because we have TON of that in the yards on our street.
ReplyDeleteI remember those days of playing with the neighborhood kids. Such sweet memories...
I love how you wrote that the shouts "peppered the night."
What a fantastic summer memory. It makes me want to live in that sort of neighborhood.
ReplyDeleteThere's something so magical about playing outside in the dusk in the summertime. I liked the idea of staying close to a house to feel comfortable and also the detail about the spitting. So boyish and something he probably did without even thinking about it!
ReplyDeleteI remember the clover hunting .. and the neighbor boy spitting. It's strange, the things our brain chooses to remember.
ReplyDeleteI kind of miss those summer nights. No worries, silly games. Sigh. This brings me back. ;)
Rebel Chick: Thank you for reading and commenting! I was glad to see something I could work with, and I appreciate the concrit on the flow!
ReplyDeleteMelanie: that is quite a compliment to have my storytelling remind you of a famous author. Wow. I appreciate your reading and commenting so much, and am glad I was able to bring you back to that carefree time in our lives :)
amygrew: thank you for reading and commenting. I didn't beat Rob to home base. I don't recall that ever happening :-P
Dawn: glad I took you back! thanks for reading and commenting! I don't know about her being super blessed, but she continued to find clovers for years after that. Keen eyesight if not great luck :)
andrea and mommytracks: thank you for reading and commenting! I'm glad to have made it seem so relatable and realistic for you. That means my "show" is getting better.
ReplyDeleteelaine: thanks for coming by and commenting :) neighborhood play like this was a big part of my childhood, glad it brought back good memories for you. And thanks for the concrit, too.. better word to describe random!
mandyland: i wish we lived in that sort of neighborhood now and that I could be giving my children these memories. hopefully soon I can. thank you for coming by to comment!
angela: thank you for commenting :) I agree about the magic!
le chef:thank you for visiting and commenting! im glad you could relate and that it kicked up some nostalgia for you. It makes me pine for the carefree too.
did you win?
ReplyDeletegreat story! I felt like a kid again, playing games in the dark. great job!
This reminded me of playing tag or hide n seek when we were kids. When kids ran through the backyards and it wasn't cause for suspicion.
ReplyDeleteI miss those times.
So cute!
ReplyDeleteI thought for sure he was going to kiss you or tell you he liked you or something while he was on the porch.
He must have liked you because he stopped to talk to you!!
Loved this!
So, so fun! I loved those dusky nights playing outside until the very last possible minute. You brought those endless summer days back to me. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThis was wonderful!
ReplyDeleteI, too, loved those magical games - daylight savings allowing us to squeeze the most out of those warm summer evenings.
I especially loved the exchange at the end. What is with boys spitting? Yuck.
I was waiting for this to turn dark...glad it didn't. It made me love the pure and innocence of this even more!
ReplyDeleteI so miss those days of playing outdoors with all the neighborhood kids...some you barely knew! I wish my kids had that!
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